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I'm getting older. I spent my whole life sitting around in one crummy joint after another with a bunch of punks like you...

Crummy joints are also tech companies.

Spending our lives sitting around in technology/biotech companies

Going back to the beginning of the the love affair with Alice

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Unclear when 11 years ago ends and current times begin, connection between brainfog and the storyline

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1. Not entirely clear:

- connection between title and storyline

- connection between storyline and Bob's attraction to Alice

2. Beginning part about night and ocean - almost poetic, interesting. Good prelude to a storyline with depth.

3. Story jumps around. Needs tightening up.

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